Sunday, May 1, 2011

Let's give it a try then

One of my friends introduced me to Trivenis.
And here I give them a shot (And in the spirit of the name, here follow 3 Trivenis)

1) woh raat mein chamakte taaron jaisi muskurahat
humare dil ki dhadkan ban gayi hai

kabhi hum pe nahi, humare saath bhi hasa karo

2) nazaron mein tumhe kaid karke
man hi man tumse baatein karte hain

tumhari wajah se hi toh aaj khooni bulati hai duniya

And here's the first one I wrote:

3) jab se gire hum tumhari baahon mein
tab se uthne ki himmat na thi

kal se hum bhi kele ke chilke zameen pe girayenge

Oh, and by the way, click here for some better ones:

4 comments:

aditya said...

Khooni thoda zyaada ho gaya, nahin ? :D

Awesome though!

ritika said...

Nice! very unlike you! ( Not that writing nice posts is unlike you, its the triveni thing that is unlike you :P) ...awesome first try.

Tulsani said...

Acchi hain ,
kaafi acchi hain,

but last line ki rhyme scheme ka kya karte hoon?

Novocaine said...

Awesome!